Thank you Joel for allowing me to post my revision of your poem in my blog.
By the way, Joel Josol is one of the members of pinoypoets yahoo group. He posted several revisions of his poem in the pinoypoets mailing list. It reminded me of "A Passionate Patience" which is a collection of essays where renowned poets discuss how they create their poems. I had fun going through his revisions.
Here's my own version of Echo...
Echo
as revised by Gisela, inspired by Joel Josol's Echo
I remain seated.
The echo of your footsteps
is behind me.
The evening wind whispers
and hums in my ear.
Sigh!
A bucket of water is poured
over the flame that is still there.
I am left with the crackle of embers.
